Maryl+Wilson+8+-+S.G.

Roosevelt Student: 8-S.G.


 * Letters of Introduction ( **due 01.21.11 **) **

Hey Samantha!

My name is Maryl Wilson, I'm an English major on my last semester here at Drake University. A little about myself: I come from the Des Moines area, graduated high school in a small town (Winterset), but both of my parents graduated from Roosevelt, and I had some friends that attended that school a few years ago. I am planning on applying my knowledge from my English degree to obtain a law degree. Not sure what law school I will be attending as of yet, but I have applied to one so far, and I will probably be applying to a few more in the near future.

I am passionate about English and writing. Writing helps me to stop and think about what I want to say/what I am trying to say, before I say it, and it also makes it easier to say what is on your mind, when it is not always easy to physically speak what is on your mind. Writing also generates ideas, and is a good way to communicate those thoughts and ideas to others who may or may not agree.

I look forward to working with you in this class, feel free to contact me on here, or my e-mail which is maryl.wilson@drake.edu for any questions, thoughts, opinions.

Talk with you soon!

-Maryl

Hi Maryl,

I'm a junior at roosevelt. My free time outside of school consists mostly of working. After high school I'm planning to major in biology although i am not yet sure which college i will be attending. After graduating I plan on furthuring my education and becoming a physical therapist.

This semester I am hoping to greatly improve my writing to improve my grade in this class and prepare for college. I sometimes feel that my writing lacks direction and that the vocab that i use doesnt make sense. My hope is that you will grade my papers harshly, and openly share your thoughts about my writing so that it may become the best that it could be. You wont hurt my feelings lol.

Thanks! sammie Millions of dollars are spent every day in the devotion of finding cures to illnesses and mantaining the health of our society. People desire to be healthy so as to have a better way of life. To be healthy is to feel satisfied in your well being, to not have outstanding pain or discomfort in the daily discourse of our lives and to have an overall state of comfort. To be healthy is a condition of being which involves the health of the body, mind, and spirit. The health of the body is a never-ending list of requirements. In order to achieve a healthy body, an individual must eat healthy, regulating all substances being put into the body. Vitamans are important for a healthy immune system and for proper body functioning.They may be accesssed naturally through food eaten or through daily vitamen supplements. Excercise is pertinent in mantaining a healthy body. Sixty minutes of cardiovascular excericise a day is recommend for all individuals although personnal goals, limits, and times recommmended may vary. Although the substances we put into our bodies are extremely important, something almost more important is what we keep out of our systems. Drugs, alcohol, and nicotene are the three main substances that should be avoided. Drugs including methamphetamines, ecstacy, acid, marijauna, ect. can permanently damage the brain, respiratory system, and veinous system. These effects are unreversable and although they are not usually immediatly noticable they take a huge toll on the human body. They can cause cancer, blindness, and asthma. Nicotene has many of the same effects as these illegal drugs. Nicotene is known to cause much damage to the human body. It blocks blood and oxygen supply to many areas of the body including the brain, can cause asthma, and is one of the top causes of cancer, in smokers as well as non-smokers through second hand smoke. Alcohol is another substance that is best to avoid. Although studies have shown that in moderation it can help with illness, breast health, and blood circulation, most people consuming alcohol do not have these goals in mind. Large amounts of alcohol being consumed, also known as binge drinking, can also have detrimental unreversable affects on the body. Heavy drinkers often end up needing liver replacements later in life as alcohol is damaging to all cells of the body. These cells are "drowning" in alcohol and are unable to access the nutrients they need and therefore are unable to function properly. Health of the body is not a simple task that is undertaken. A healthy body is a life long commitment to making good choices and regulating substances allowed to enter the system. However important health of the body is, health of the mind may ultimatelly be argued as the most important health system. There are many diseases that affect the human mind including OCD, depression, autism, and anorexia. These disorders are often harder to heal than physical syptoms and diseases. They are very detrimental to the health of all of the bodies systems as health of the mind can determine the functioning of the rest of the body. If a person is depressed or has another mental health disorder they undortunatly may come to not value themselves as a person and are often less likely to take care of themselves. They often disregard warnings affecting the health of their body and do little to mantain a healthy lifestyle. Treatment and medication to disorders such as depression and OCD are easily and redily available, however these take time, it is a slow healing process dedicated to make the patient feel better about themselves and their life. Anorexia and bulemia among other eating disorders can do major damage to the health of your body. Through starving oneself you are causes the body to overwork itself and mantain extra calories in order to perform the daily tasks your body must complete. Continuing to starve yourself causes your body to look for energy in other sources, your body will often take energy from needed parts in your body and your system can begin to rapidly deteriorate. Suffering from balemia is just as bad. The stomach acid present in vomit will slowly eat away at the lining of your esophagus and throat. Balemics also often have bad breath from the constant presence of this acid and the vomit. Health in the body and mind often closely relate to spiritual health. Spiritual health may be looked upon in many different formats. Whether or not you are a religous person or not your spiritual health is very important in the overall health of the bodies functioning system. Spiritual beliefs vary among person to person, but however you believe or look upon such things it has many obvious affects on the body. Spiritual beliefs can often affect the substances and food being put into the body. Some people believe in not eating certain things or animals due to religion or morals. Some people also share these beliefs when it comes to drugs and may often use weed or other substances as a way of getting in touch with their spiritual side. Spiritualism can often be linked to mental health. Someone who is very spiritual is often more likely to accept their life and have a strong support system to fall upon before falling into a bout of depression or self loathing. Relationships and a strong support system are yet another very important part of being healthy. The relationship that a child mantains with their parents and family members often plays a large role in reinforcing habits that will carry on for the rest of your life. Children who have a bad relationship with parents are more likely to develop unhealthy eating habits and are at a higher riskto turn to drugs and crime later in life as a way to escape or deal with their pain. Children, especially young girls, are more likely to develop eating disorders if their mother is very concerned with her self image and waist size. A mother who is constantly concerned with her weight or often comments on her childs size or looks will reinstill the self doubt into their daughter. Children who see their parents smoking are more likely to pick up the habit themselves, and often at a younger age. It is often said that children learn from eaxample. This can also be true in a positive light. Children whose parents prepare balanced meals and encourage healthy behavior and eating habits are more likely to continue this healthy lifestyle even after leaving the care of their parents. The relationships that an individual mantains with others play a large undeniable part of overall health. Individuals with a large support group are more likely to succeed and reach for higher life goals and expectations. A "healthy body" is a never ending agenda of tasks to be completed and monitored at all times. It is a multidimensional thought including body, mind, spiritual, and relationship health. A healthy body is a lifelong task, always to be taken seriously and requiring careful consideration and thought.
 * Rough Draft - Definition ( ****RHS** due 01.27.11; **171** due 01.28.11 **) **
 * ﻿ **

I have a really hard time figuring out how to word my sentencese to get them to sound best! when im writing its like my mind just blanks. I also feel that some of my writing is unfocused. please feel free to point out any sentences that you feel are not needed. Help please! (: Thank you so much maryl!

(**note to self: research to get exact scientifical figures and statistics to support claims for when writing revision)**

" The health of the body is a never-ending list of requirements. In order to achieve a healthy body, an individual must eat healthy, regulating the amount of fat and sugars being put into the body. Excercise is pertinent in mantaining a healthy body. Sixty minutes of cardiovascular excericise is recommend**ed** for all individuals although personnal goals, limits, and times recommmended may vary. Vitamans are important for a healthy immune system and for proper body functioning. They may be accesssed naturally through food eaten or through daily vitamen supplements." "Health of the mind may ultimatelly be argued as the most important health system. There are many diseases that affect the human mind including OCD, depression, autism, and anorexia. These disorders are often harder to heal than physical syptoms and diseases."
 * Sam- **
 * There is a lot working in what you have so far, and you bring some interesting points to the table. However, I have a few things for you to think about with what you have so far: **
 * I love what you are saying here, I can tell that you are passionate about physical health and I can tell you want to be a physical therapist. Since the first sentence is about what someone may put into their body, think about maybe moving the sentence about vitamins in front of the sentence that begins with "Exercise is pertinent..." since they go together. This may also be a good place to talk about other things people put into their bodies. Have you considered discussing the effects certain fruits and vegetables have on the body? (Example: Carrots are good for the eyes, tomatoes promote heart health, etc.) What about cigarettes, drugs, and/or alcohol? Then, when you move onto exercise, my first thought as a reader was Okay, so she thinks people should exercise, and sometimes that can be adjusted to fit each person. Sixty minutes every day? Twice a week? Another question your reader may have is Why? Why should your reader care about being healthy? Why do you care about being healthy? **
 * I know you said that was all you had for now, which is fine, but I think this is also an important part, and I'm glad you also touched on mental/spiritual health. Something to think about as you finish your paper might be: **
 * 1. How does someone suffering from one of those disorders maintain their health? **
 * 2. Is someone with autism doomed to be "unhealthy" since their mental health is unchangable? **
 * 3. How would someone suffering from depression might be considered "unhealthy"? What could someone with depression do to become "healthy"? **
 * -I'm putting quotations around those words because being healthy when someone is struggling with a mental/emotional condition sort of blurs the lines when thinking about health...what I mean by that is, someone with depression might be in great physical shape, but they're struggling with overwhelming sadness. What does it mean to be healthy for someone like them? **


 * One more thing (I swear!); you have touched on the importance of physical health, and started on a section about mental health. How about talking about maintaining healthy relationships? Are healthy relationships with family, friends, acquaintances, and even significant others just as important as mental/physical health? It ties with mental health, but I think it might be something of its own. We've heard stories about people that go through relationships they've always known to be "normal" but have turned out to be quite the opposite. **
 * I will be on my computer off and on throughout the day tomorrow (Saturday), so feel free to email me with any questions you might have about what I've said, or if you need help with anything. Again, my email is maryl.wilson@drake.edu **
 * Hope this gave you some ideas to work with on finishing your paper :) **
 * -Maryl **




 * Revision - Definition ( ****RHS** due 01.31.11; **171** due 02.01.11 **) **

Millions of dollars are spent every day in the devotion of finding cures to illnesses and mantaining the health of our society. People desire to be healthy so as to have a better way of life. To be healthy is to feel satisfied in the well being of the body, to not have outstanding pain or discomfort in the daily discourse of our lives and to have an overall state of comfort. To be healthy is a condition of being which involves the health of the body, mind, and spirit. The health of the body is a never-ending list of requirements. In order to achieve a healthy body, an individual must eat healthy, regulating all substances being put into the body. Vitamans are important for a healthy immune system and for proper body functioning.They may be accesssed naturally through food eaten or through daily vitamen supplements. Excercise is pertinent in mantaining a healthy body. Sixty minutes of cardiovascular excericise a day is recommend for all individuals although personnal goals, limits, and times recommmended may vary. Although the substances we put into our bodies are extremely important, something almost more important is what we keep out of our systems. Drugs, alcohol, and nicotene are the three main substances that should be avoided. Drugs including methamphetamines, ecstacy, acid, marijauna, ect. can permanently damage the brain, respiratory system, and veinous system. These effects are unreversable and although they are not usually immediatly noticable they take a huge toll on the human body. They can cause cancer, blindness, and asthma. Nicotene has many of the same effects as these illegal drugs. Nicotene is known to cause much damage to the human body. It blocks blood and oxygen supply to many areas of the body including the brain, can cause asthma, and is one of the top causes of cancer, in smokers as well as non-smokers through second hand smoke. Alcohol is another substance that is best to avoid. Although studies have shown that in moderation it can help with illness, breast health, and blood circulation, most people consuming alcohol do not have these goals in mind. Large amounts of alcohol being consumed, also known as binge drinking, can also have detrimental unreversable affects on the body. Heavy drinkers often end up needing liver replacements later in life as alcohol is damaging to all cells of the body. These cells are "drowning" in alcohol and are unable to access the nutrients they need and therefore are unable to function properly. Health of the body is not a simple task that is undertaken. A healthy body is a life long commitment to making good choices and regulating substances allowed to enter the system. However important health of the body is, health of the mind may ultimatelly be argued as the most important health system. There are many diseases that affect the human mind including OCD, depression, autism, and anorexia. These disorders are often harder to heal than physical syptoms and diseases. They are very detrimental to the health of all of the bodies systems as health of the mind can determine the functioning of the rest of the body. If a person is depressed or has another mental health disorder they undortunatly may come to not value themselves as a person and are often less likely to take care of themselves. Treatment and medication to treat disorders such as depression and OCD are easily and redily available, however these take time, it is a slow healing process dedicated to make the patient feel better about themselves and their life. Anorexia and bulemia among other eating disorders can do major damage to the health of your body. Through starving oneself you are causes the body to overwork itself and mantain extra calories in order to perform the daily tasks your body must complete. Continuing to starve oneself causes the body to look for energy in other sources, the human body will often take energy from other bodily systems causing these systems to rapidly deteriorate. Suffering from balemia is often just as detrimental to the health of the human body. The stomach acid present in vomit will slowly eat away at the lining of the esophagus and throat. Balemics also often have bad breath from the constant presence of this acid and the vomit. Health in the body and mind often closely relate to spiritual health. Spiritual health may be looked upon in many different formats. Whether or not someone is a religous person, spiritual health is very important in the overall health of the bodies functioning system. Spiritual beliefs vary among person to person, but however one believes or looks upon such things it has many obvious affects on the body. Spiritual beliefs can often affect the substances and food being put into the body. Some people believe in not eating certain things or animals due to religion or morals. Some people also share these beliefs when it comes to drugs and may often use weed or other substances as a way of getting in touch with their spiritual side. Spiritualism can often be linked to mental health. Someone who is very spiritual is often more likely to accept their life and have a strong support system to fall upon before falling into a bout of depression or self loathing. Relationships and a strong support system are yet another very important part of being healthy. The relationship that a child mantains with their parents and family members often plays a large role in reinforcing habits that will carry on for the rest of your life. Children who have a bad relationship with parents are more likely to develop unhealthy eating habits and are at a higher riskto turn to drugs and crime later in life as a way to escape or deal with their pain. Children, especially young girls, are more likely to develop eating disorders if their mother is very concerned with her self image and waist size. A mother who is constantly concerned with her weight or often comments on her childs size or looks will reinstill the self doubt into their daughter. Children who see their parents smoking are more likely to pick up the habit themselves, and often at a younger age. It is often said that children learn from eaxample. This can also be true in a positive light. Children whose parents prepare balanced meals and encourage healthy behavior and eating habits are more likely to continue this healthy lifestyle even after leaving the care of their parents. The relationships that an individual mantains with others play a large undeniable part of overall health. Individuals with a large support group are more likely to succeed and reach for higher life goals and expectations. A "healthy body" is a never ending agenda of tasks to be completed and monitored at all times. It is a multidimensional thought including body, mind, spiritual, and relationship health. A healthy body is a lifelong task, always to be taken seriously and requiring careful consideration and thought.

ahh i still have lotsa work to do bear with me i am sorry!
 * Sammie-**
 * I apologize for responding late.**
 * Your paper is starting to come together, but there are a few things you still need to look at and consider changing.** Excercise is pertinent in mantaining a healthy body. Sixty minutes of cardiovascular excericise a day is recommend for all individuals although personnal goals, limits, and times recommmended may vary. **Though this part is important, I think you should move this sentence down and put it after you are finished talking about the effects of drugs and alcohol, etc** **. on the body. That will help with the structure of your paper by making it easier to read. Also, this is pretty much all you have for exercise. Is there anything else you would like to say about the importance of exercise? The effects it not only has on the body, but how it effects the mind and spirit? When we met the other day, you told me that at the age of 40, one would have to exercise 60 minutes a day just to maintain their weight; that is an interesting fact that you might want to include along with exercise (Don't forget to include where you learned that, if it came from a website or textbook).**

They often disregard warnings affecting the health of their body and do little to mantain a healthy lifestyle.

**﻿** ﻿ **-Maryl** **﻿**
 * When we were talking the other day, I asked you what this meant and you said that this sentence had to do with people who suffered from addiction; for example, someone who is addicted to smoking would disregard the warning signs (phlegm changing color, progressively worse cough, development of asthma, etc.) because of their addiction. I think it would strengthen your paper to form the sentence that way, because the way the sentence is written right now is a little confusing because as a reader, I'm not sure what warning signs you're talking about, and it could mean a lot of things.** Continuing to starve yourself causes your body to look for energy in other sources, your body will often take energy from needed parts in your body and your system can begin to rapidly deteriorate. Suffering from balemia is just as bad. The stomach acid present in vomit will slowly eat away at the lining of your esophagus and throat. Balemics also often have bad breath from the constant presence of this acid and the vomit. Health in the body and mind often closely relate to spiritual health. ** ﻿This is great information to go in your paper, but don't forget to change the "you, yourself, your" because in a paper like this, you're trying to say something to the reader, trying to tell the reader how you define something, not talk at them...does that make sense? **
 * Keep working away at it, you'll do just fine, try not to stress too much about it. Again, if you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask, I'm here to help!**
 * One more thing, did you find out from Ms. Petra about a bibliography (how many sources you need, etc.)? Let me know.**


 * FINAL - Definition ( ****RHS** due 02.02.11; **171** due 02.04.11 **) **

Millions of dollars are spent every day in the devotion of finding cures to illnesses and mantaining the health of our society. People desire to be healthy so as to have a better way of life. To be healthy is to feel satisfied in the well being of the body, to not have outstanding pain or discomfort in the daily discourse of our lives and to have an overall state of comfort. To be healthy is a condition of being which involves the health of the body, mind, and spirit. The health of the body is a never-ending list of requirements. In order to achieve a healthy body, an individual must eat healthy, regulating all substances being put into the body. Vitamans are important for a healthy immune system and for proper body functioning.They may be accesssed naturally through food eaten or through daily vitamen supplements. Excercise is pertinent in mantaining a healthy body. Sixty minutes of cardiovascular excericise a day is recommend for all individuals although personnal goals, limits, and times recommmended may vary. Although the substances we put into our bodies are extremely important, something almost more important is what we keep out of our systems. Drugs, alcohol, and nicotene are the three main substances that should be avoided. Drugs including methamphetamines, ecstacy, acid, marijauna, ect. can permanently damage the brain, respiratory system, and veinous system. These effects are unreversable and although they are not usually immediatly noticable they take a huge toll on the human body. They can cause cancer, blindness, and asthma. Nicotene has many of the same effects as these illegal drugs. Nicotene is known to cause much damage to the human body. It blocks blood and oxygen supply to many areas of the body including the brain, can cause asthma, and is one of the top causes of cancer, in smokers as well as non-smokers through second hand smoke. Alcohol is another substance that is best to avoid. Although studies have shown that in moderation it can help with illness, breast health, and blood circulation, most people consuming alcohol do not have these goals in mind. Large amounts of alcohol being consumed, also known as binge drinking, can also have detrimental unreversable affects on the body. Heavy drinkers often end up needing liver replacements later in life as alcohol is damaging to all cells of the body. These cells are "drowning" in alcohol and are unable to access the nutrients they need and therefore are unable to function properly. Health of the body is not a simple task that is undertaken. A healthy body is a life long commitment to making good choices and regulating substances allowed to enter the system. However important health of the body is, health of the mind may ultimatelly be argued as the most important health system. There are many diseases that affect the human mind including OCD, depression, autism, and anorexia. These disorders are often harder to heal than physical syptoms and diseases. They are very detrimental to the health of all of the bodies systems as health of the mind can determine the functioning of the rest of the body. If a person is depressed or has another mental health disorder they undortunatly may come to not value themselves as a person and are often less likely to take care of themselves. Treatment and medication to treat disorders such as depression and OCD are easily and redily available, however these take time, it is a slow healing process dedicated to make the patient feel better about themselves and their life. Anorexia and bulemia among other eating disorders can do major damage to the health of your body. Through starving oneself you are causes the body to overwork itself and mantain extra calories in order to perform the daily tasks your body must complete. Continuing to starve oneself causes the body to look for energy in other sources, the human body will often take energy from other bodily systems causing these systems to rapidly deteriorate. Suffering from balemia is often just as detrimental to the health of the human body. The stomach acid present in vomit will slowly eat away at the lining of the esophagus and throat. Balemics also often have bad breath from the constant presence of this acid and the vomit. Health in the body and mind often closely relate to spiritual health. Spiritual health may be looked upon in many different formats. Whether or not someone is a religous person, spiritual health is very important in the overall health of the bodies functioning system. Spiritual beliefs vary among person to person, but however one believes or looks upon such things it has many obvious affects on the body. Spiritual beliefs can often affect the substances and food being put into the body. Some people believe in not eating certain things or animals due to religion or morals. Some people also share these beliefs when it comes to drugs and may often use weed or other substances as a way of getting in touch with their spiritual side. Spiritualism can often be linked to mental health. Someone who is very spiritual is often more likely to accept their life and have a strong support system to fall upon before falling into a bout of depression or self loathing. Relationships and a strong support system are yet another very important part of being healthy. The relationship that a child mantains with their parents and family members often plays a large role in reinforcing habits that will carry on for the rest of your life. Children who have a bad relationship with parents are more likely to develop unhealthy eating habits and are at a higher riskto turn to drugs and crime later in life as a way to escape or deal with their pain. Children, especially young girls, are more likely to develop eating disorders if their mother is very concerned with her self image and waist size. A mother who is constantly concerned with her weight or often comments on her childs size or looks will reinstill the self doubt into their daughter. Children who see their parents smoking are more likely to pick up the habit themselves, and often at a younger age. It is often said that children learn from eaxample. This can also be true in a positive light. Children whose parents prepare balanced meals and encourage healthy behavior and eating habits are more likely to continue this healthy lifestyle even after leaving the care of their parents. The relationships that an individual mantains with others play a large undeniable part of overall health. Individuals with a large support group are more likely to succeed and reach for higher life goals and expectations. A "healthy body" is a never ending agenda of tasks to be completed and monitored at all times. It is a multidimensional thought including body, mind, spiritual, and relationship health. A healthy body is a lifelong task, always to be taken seriously and requiring careful consideration and thought.

This is great. Excellent connecting sentences, and good job on the 3rd person stance. Let me know what your teacher thinks! -Maryl
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The aspect of my writing that has improved the most with the help of my drake partner is how I approach my writing. Maryl helped me to look at different aspects of the paper and showed me ways that i could incorporate new ideas into my writing that expanded on ideas already present in my writing. Maryl has helped me the most with focusing on what persepective i am writing my paper in and expanding on ideas. I was able to write much more because of the ideas and details that she presented to me. On my next paper i need the most help with continuing to expand on ideas that i had failed to think of.


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OMG forgive me! I have had the flu and so have fell completely out of touch with the world lately. i am so sorry!!!

Insurance

Elderly- LIfe protection and garuntee things will be taken care of, life, home, medical Middle Age- Health, car, life, home Young Adults- car Children- stability

Insurance. It is a word filled with questions, what if's, doubt, and reassurance. It is a word that holds so many right definitions in one language that the true meaning of the word often becomes blurred. As young children, "insurance" is not a word found in our vocabulary in any sense. Yet is always prevalent in our lives. As young children our parents or caregivers provide us with the insurance of being loved and cared for. Always to be taken care of. Our every need always to be met. We are unknowingly provided with the insurance in life that our parents give to us, and as we grow older, the right to insurance becomes our own to provide. **//Is insurance a right or a privilege? There is much controversy over whether or not people have the right to insurance or if it is a privilege that comes with having a full-time salary-paying job; this might help you expand the different meanings of insurance.//** As young adults the word "insurance" becomes a dreaded thought in our mind.**//Why, as young adults, does insurance become a dreaded thought? Is it because young adults are expected to start paying for their own insurance at a particular age?//** We are often adressed by our parents with speeches of "insurance" yet the words mold into nothing. However it still holds little real meaning. **//I'm not quite sure what you mean by this; is it the fact that our parents are reminding us of paying for insurance? Or does it hold little meaning because young adults might not quite grasp the importance of insurance?//** Our wish is only to have automobile insurance, in case we back the car into a pole. **//Or gets stolen, flood damage, etc.//** Our real insurance is still provided by our parents. **//What do you mean by "real" insurance? Are you referring to health insurance here?//** A thought not yet too consuming in our lives. When we grow older still "insruance" becomes a plague. **//So true!//** Suddenly there is health insurance, life insurance, auto insurance, home insurance. The need to make the children feel "insured" in their right to a safe, healthy home.**//Does every child have a right to a safe and healthy home? What about those not fortunate enough to be raised to believe that or haven't been fortunate enough to live in a safe and healthy home? How about low-income families that don't have health insurance at all?//** They are things that every adult must deal with, but what does it mean? What does it really mean to have health insurance? **//This is a great question, something I think we all ask ourselves when the bills come.//**To pay nothing and have all bills and prescriptions payed for? **//What do you mean by paying nothing? Some people think they are paying "nothing," but someone else is always paying. Maybe a question to ask is what is the real meaning of "free" healthcare? Is there such a thing? If so, how? If not, why are we calling it "free"?//** To have to pay every single penny and yet still have "health insurance"? To be garunteed in some way the right to be healthy? **//Is it guaranteed?//** It could be argued as the basis of "insurance", the need to be healthy in order to perform and other function in life. A need that we have from our first breath of air. Without the insurance of helath, comes death. **//This is a strong statement, I think you are on the right track here, but maybe re-read what is to be argued about the "basis of insurance," and think about what you're trying to say. Are you implying that without health insurance, people will die? If so, what about those young adults that live relatively healthy lives that don't get sick very often, that don't have health insurance because they don't want to pay for something they don't use?//**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Revision - Classification/Division ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 02.23.11; **171** due 02.25.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

This is a good start. So far, what I'm getting from this essay is that you believe that people have a right to health insurance, and throughout different stages of our lives, the importance of different types of insurance varies. Please read over the questions I've posed in bold within your writing and think about what those questions are asking. You have a great topic, and a controversial one at that, which always makes writing more interesting and, at times, easier. Something else to consider would be what do **you** think it means to have insurance, Sammie? How imporant is it? People often get insurance because they want to protect what they care about. I have insurance on my car, because I have paid for it myself, and if anything were to happen to it, I want to know that it will get fixed without me having to sacrifice an arm and a leg for it. My parents have insurance on their house because they built it from the ground up with their hard-earned money and want to protect it, not just because that is what keeps them safe from bad weather, but because there are many memories inside that house, there was a lot of work put into it, they were able to provide shelter and security for their family with it. Same thing can be said about health insurance: people want to live long lives, they want to be around to see grandchildren, and because life throws some interesting and tough situations our way, we protect our bodies with insurance to make the tough times go a little easier. I hope this helps, let me know if you have any other questions. Glad you're feeling better, I was getting worried!
 * //Sammie-//**

-Maryl

ahhh help me, i know what i want to write about yet i cant seem to get it into words... i want to show that insurance has many different meanings to different peple but show the importance of helath insurance....but it keeps sounding like a definition paper!! also im struggling with my intro.... im sturggling because i cant seem to word or fit it all together


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">FINAL - Classification/Division ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 03.01.11; **171** due 03.04.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

Graham 1 Samantha Graham As young children, "insurance" is not a word found in our vocabulary in any sense. Yet is always prevalent in our lives. As young children our parents or caregivers provide us with the insurance of being loved and cared for. Always to be taken care of. Our every need always to be met. We are provided with health insurance, life insurance, any kind of “insurance” our caregivers see fit and are readily able to provide to us. We are unknowingly provided with the insurance in life that our parents give to us, and as we grow older, the right to insurance becomes our own to provide. As adults, we must work hard and do whatever it takes to provide the same great privileges to our own children and families. Every person should have the right to insurance to make them feel safe and cared for, yet not every person is able to provide themselves and their family with this insurance that is their own problem to provide. As young adults the word "insurance" becomes a dreaded thought in our mind. We must now take on responsibilities that were never present in our younger lives. We are often addressed by our parents with speeches of "insurance" yet the words mold into nothing and it still holds little real meaning. Insurance is everything. Insurance is car insurance, life insurance, home insurance, health insurance. It is bigger than many give it thought. It is insurance that when your daughter gets sick you don’t have to pick up extra hours to pay the hospital bill. It is insurance that when someone rear-ends you, you will still have private transportation for your family instead of taking the bus. It is insurance that the tree that crashed into your living room wont steel money from your sons college savings. But at such a young age, we cannot for see into the future and grasp the Graham 2 importance of insurance. To us, it is only money spent to protect us from something that never seems to happen. It is money spent to insure that when we back into a pole or slide on the icy roads, our weekend plans with friends wont be hindered due to the lack of a car. When we grow older still "insurance" becomes a plague. Suddenly we are hit with the importance of insurance. We are worried about protecting our children, our families, our homes, the life that we have come to know and love. It becomes one of the most important things in ensuring that this life that we have created is protected. Suddenly we are hit with the responsibility to provide our children with what we were provided. All too soon we become responsible for lecturing our own children on the importance of insurance. But most importantly we must continue to provide insurance for ourselves and our loved ones. These are things that every adult must deal with, but what does it mean? What does it really mean to have health insurance? To have to pay nothing out of pocket but receive the best health care? To be forced to pay every single penny in order to take advantage of the health system? Health insurance is supposed to protect us, provide for us, give us peace of mind. Yet often it does not. As our age changes, so does our need for insurance and how we view insurance. What are we forced to sacrifice to provide ourselves with insurance? An arm? A leg? Time with our families? Peace of mind? How necessary is insurance? These are questions families and individuals are faced with everyday.


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">REFLECTION #2 ****<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 03.22.11; **171** due 03.25.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Rough Draft - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 03.30.11; **171** due 04.01.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **
 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Sammie--- First things first, I won't be judging on your paper! You are right, we may or may not have differing opinions, but, what I have found important about writing a paper you have to argue (often it's about something controversial and you feel strongly about, because that's what makes argument papers so fun) for, is to consider the other side, because even if you don't agree with the other side of an issue, you can still be able to understand and respect where the person who stands on that side is coming from. That being said, I might ask some questions that you may not agree with, but I think it's beneficial to someone to know both sides of an argument to better support the side they stand with...make sense? (so I'll probably be playing devil's advocate here and there, but only to make you think and perhaps expand your writing, it won't be judging, and my personal opinion means nothing when it comes to writing this paper. It's about you taking a side on an issue, breaking apart the issue and supporting your stance in writing.) **

When i tried to pull my paper off google docs something happened and im not quite sure what... I am going to see if i can pull my rough draft off of my home comp. to work with on my revision paper so for the time being please bare with me. This is just a rough outline of my ideas.

Americans are promised life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness. Yet what does this define? How can you promise a life? Our government can promise to protect our lives and safety. But to what extent are we promised life? Safety? Insurance? A new life if we ruin our first one? **These are excellent questions to be thinking about. Can we really be promised life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness? Is that what our Founding Fathers wanted?** Of course not. We are not expected to pay for peoples mortgages who can not afford them, nor are we expected to buy cold medicine for the person who is short of cash. If we are not expected to do these things, then the U.S. should not be expected to provide health insurance for all. All living people unable to take care of themselves should be helped, but health insurance should not be a right to all. By providing health insurance for all: taxes go up people who previously had great health insurance lose their good benefits (some have worked their whole life)**do you have examples of benefits that people could lose? this would strengthen this point.** money that does not need to be spent is being spent on people who do not need health insurance or all benefits many workeres lose their jobs **how would nationalized healthcare cause people to lose their jobs?** illegal immigrants would recieve health care **These are good points, but I believe you can actually access the current bill and (even though it would be tough with all the legal jargon, and the fact that it is thousands of pages...I have yet to get through all of it myself, but it's just something to consider) use that as a source to strengthen your points. There are also tons of other scholarly works out there by doctors and economists that have published articles on the effects of nationalizing healthcare that you could look at to help your argument.** However, those truly unable to afford health care shoudl be helped. There should be more free**(are these "free" clinics actually free?)** clinics.more donated prescriptions from drug companies and hospitals. (they often throw away old medicine when it passes expiration date altough it has been proven to work just as well for an allotted amount of time, why not give these to people who can not afford them**? This is a good question, do you have a possible solution you're working on to propose?)** If there are clinics like planned parenthood that can operate efficiently without all of their patients having healthcare then there should be more clinics like them! If doctors are willing to go to thrid world contries and work for free to care for patients then why are htye not willing to care for us citizens at a less expensive price. It is their own country and their own people. **(true, but many doctors will get grants from different organizations to go to other countries and care for others and also to study different illnesses that are not common to the US. And are they really not willing to care for US citizens?)** There should be other programs developed for people without healthcare. We do not need to give it to them. It is something that people work hard for, just as they work hard for their homes, their cars, and their other valued possessions.
 * Sammie-**
 * You have an excellent start to a paper and it seems that in this paper you are saying that people in the United States have always worked to get what they are trying to accomplish and with that work comes benefits., insurance being one of those benefits. I see you are concerned with doctors who are going overseas to care for others when there are plenty that need help over here. What I want to know is if you have potential solutions for these issues? You say there should be other programs developed for people without healthcare, and to not just give it away. You also mention planned parenthood, which receives federal money to stay afloat in order to provide care to women who cannot afford it...meaning it comes from taxpayers. Something to consider is that to start programs and the like costs money, and as you are aware, the United States is in quite a bit of debt, so how would someone get around to it?**
 * I am excited to see you are writing about this because there is so much information out there that would greatly support your argument, and I'm glad to see someone your age actively thinking about and trying to work out such a controversial issue!**

Maryl, I understand this is a controversial subject and we may have different opinions concerning the matter....but please dont judge me or give my paper bad suggestions lol (: **bad suggestions?! never!! haha**


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Revision (1) - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 04.05.11; **171** due 04.08.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

Americans are promised life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness. Yet what does this define? How can you promise a life? Our government can promise to protect our lives and safety. But to what extent are we promised life? Safety? Insurance? A new life if we ruin our first one? **These are excellent questions to be thinking about. Can we really be promised life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness? Is that what our Founding Fathers wanted?** Of course not. We are not expected to pay for peoples mortgages who can not afford them, nor are we expected to buy cold medicine for the person who is short of cash. If we are not expected to do these things, then the U.S. should not be expected to provide health insurance for all. All living people unable to take care of themselves should be helped, but health insurance should not be a right to all. By providing health insurance for all: taxes go up people who previously had great health insurance lose their good benefits (some have worked their whole life)**do you have examples of benefits that people could lose? this would strengthen this point.** money that does not need to be spent is being spent on people who do not need health insurance or all benefits There are hundreds of thousands of employees currently working for insurance companies who spend their days deciding whether or not they will grant you coverage with their health insurance company. These employees include nurses, business majors, risk managers, ect. all working together to decide what is in the best interest of their company. These employees have families, homes, and bills to pay. (note2self get job position titles) This is why we live in a free market society, so that if one company denies us coverage, we have hundreds of others to turn to for coverage. If health insurance is to be provided to all, is our country not slowly turning into a socialist economy? illegal immigrants would recieve health care **These are good points, but I believe you can actually access the current bill and (even though it would be tough with all the legal jargon, and the fact that it is thousands of pages...I have yet to get through all of it myself, but it's just something to consider) use that as a source to strengthen your points. There are also tons of other scholarly works out there by doctors and economists that have published articles on the effects of nationalizing healthcare that you could look at to help your argument.** However, those truly unable to afford health care shoudl be helped. There should be more free**(are these "free" clinics actually free?)** clinics.more donated prescriptions from drug companies and hospitals. (they often throw away old medicine when it passes expiration date altough it has been proven to work just as well for an allotted amount of time, why not give these to people who can not afford them**? This is a good question, do you have a possible solution you're working on to propose?)** If there are clinics like planned parenthood that can operate efficiently without all of their patients having healthcare then there should be more clinics like them! If doctors are willing to go to thrid world contries and work for free to care for patients then why are htye not willing to care for us citizens at a less expensive price. It is their own country and their own people. **(true, but many doctors will get grants from different organizations to go to other countries and care for others and also to study different illnesses that are not common to the US. And are they really not willing to care for US citizens?)** There should be other programs developed for people without healthcare. We do not need to give it to them. It is something that people work hard for, just as they work hard for their homes, their cars, and their other valued possessions.


 * Revision (2) - Argument (RHS** due 04.13.11; **171** due 04.15.11**<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

Americans are promised life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness. Yet what does this define? How can you promise a life? Our government can promise to protect our lives and safety. But to what extent are we promised life? Safety? Insurance? A new life if we ruin our first one? If we are dying of cancer does this mean we are promised the right to treatment even if we find ourselves unable to pay for it? If someone has smoked for twenty years and is in need of a new lung, must tax-payers be forced to pay for the procedure? Of course not. We are not expected to pay for peoples mortgages who can not afford them, nor are we expected to buy cold medicine for the person who is short of cash. If we are not expected to do these things, then the U.S. should not be expected to provide health insurance for all. Charles Darwin long ago presented an idea we are all familiar with, survival of the fittest. For thousands of years, those who survived were individuals who were able to readily provide for themselves and their family. Would this concept then not also apply today? As the world overpopulates and we are forced to look into ways of "new" living, we should look into "old" pracitices of simple surviving. By providing healthcare to all tax-payers would lose money, and individuals would lose quality coverage. All living people unable to take care of themselves should be helped, but health insurance should not be a right to all. According to The Washington Times, Obama's new health care plan will raise taxes over half a trillion dollars over the next ten years. These taxes will be implemented in all parts of our life. Snooki wannabes may be forced to give up the dream as Obama has approved a 10% tax increase on all indoor tanning services. Health Insurance providers are looking at a $60 billion dollar tax increase through 2019, causing the price of insurance for individuals and families with existing coverage to greatly increase. Obamas new law will also require that individuals and families spend more of their own money before insurance becomes eligible or tax-deductable. Currently the rate that may be spent before it becomes tax deductable is 7.5%, Obamax new bill will raise this rate to 10% of income. Obamas new bill would also force business' with more than 50 employees to provide non-optional health insurance coverage. Many employees of these small business' currently provide their own health insurance. By being forced to accept the insurace provided by their employer, their rates may be heftily increased. Individuals who currently choose not to carry health insurace would also have an additional amount coming out of their income that they do not wish to pay for or have provided. Employers who do not provide insurance to workers will be heavily fined. By providing health insurance to employees many of these business' will be forced to raise prices on all goods and services provided to simply remain afloat. This, once again, is another way that all citizens would end up paying more money. Under Obamas new proposed bill, health insurance companies would become unable to deny coverage to families and individuals based on pre-existing conditions. This would be the cause of hundreds of thousands of health insurance company employees losing their jobs. This would be the cause of yet another large price increase in insurace, causing individuals and families to set aside even more money for required health insurance. Would this then not also be the cause of our contry slowly becoming a socialist nation? Less money could be spent throughout our entire nation if we were to simply provide more free clinics around the nation. By making these more easily accessble to those without health insurance, we would be able to provide care to those who need it, without paying for services unneeded or creating such large tax increases. If these clinics were created, tax increase would still be nessicary, but not in such dramatic and noticable ways. This would also save individuals and families from paying for uneeded or unwanted coverage. As Americans, we are given the possiblity to create our own American dream, not to provide the dream for others. By providing health insurance for all United States citizens are being punished. Indiviuals and families would be forced to spend more money. Business' would face increased operating exxpenses, increasing the price of all goods and services produced. A half trillion dollar tax increase would affect every indiviual living in the U.S. economically. With our economy in the current state, that is not something that americans are currently prepared to deal with.

Ahhhhhhhhhhh! help me cut out the fat pleaseee. i tried to refocus my essay so that i wasnt talking aobut so much. i have NO idea how to conclude my essay... thanks!


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">FINAL - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 04.19.11; **171** due 04.22.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

Americans are promised life, liberty, and the pursuit of happiness. Yet what does this define? How can you promise a life? Our government can promise to protect our lives and safety. But to what extent are we promised life? Safety? Insurance? A new life if we ruin our first one? If we are dying of cancer does this mean we are promised the right to treatment even if we find ourselves unable to pay for it? If someone has smoked for twenty years and is in need of a new lung, must tax-payers be forced to pay for the procedure? Of course not. We are not expected to pay for peoples mortgages who can not afford them, nor are we expected to buy cold medicine for the person who is short of cash. If we are not expected to do these things, then the U.S. should not be expected to provide health insurance for all. Charles Darwin long ago presented an idea we are all familiar with, survival of the fittest. For thousands of years, those who survived were individuals who were able to readily provide for themselves and their family. Would this concept then not also apply today? **Good Question** As the world overpopulates and we are forced to look into ways of "new" living, we should look into "old" pracitices of simple surviving. ** ﻿Providing an example or two of these "old practices" would strengthen your argument. ** By providing healthcare to all tax-payers would lose money, and individuals would lose quality coverage. All living people unable to take care of themselves should be helped, but health insurance should not be a right to all. **What do you think having the "right" to healthcare means? There is some debate about insurance being a right and a privilege, explaining what you mean by "right" would help your reader understand where you're coming from.** According to The Washington Times, Obama's new health care plan will raise taxes over half a trillion dollars over the next ten years. These taxes will be implemented in all parts of our life. Snooki wannabes may be forced to give up the dream as Obama has approved a 10% tax increase on all indoor tanning services. Health Insurance providers are looking at a $60 billion dollar tax increase through 2019, causing the price of insurance for individuals and families with existing coverage to greatly increase. Obamas new law will also require that individuals and families spend more of their own money before insurance becomes eligible or tax-deductable. Currently the rate that may be spent before it becomes tax deductable is 7.5%, Obamax new bill will raise this rate to 10% of income. Obamas new bill would also force business' with more than 50 employees to provide non-optional health insurance coverage. **Is this also from the Washington Times article? If not, site your source here.** Many employees of these small business' currently provide their own health insurance. By being forced to accept the insurace provided by their employer, their rates may be heftily increased .**﻿** Are employees really being forced into the insurance plans provided by their employer? If yes, why or how are they being forced? Aren't there options to purchase your own insurance outside of where you work? Individuals who currently choose not to carry health insurace would also have an additional amount coming out of their income that they do not wish to pay for or have provided. Employers who do not provide insurance to workers will be heavily fined. By providing health insurance to employees many of these business' will be forced to raise prices on all goods and services provided to simply remain afloat. This, once again, is another way that all citizens would end up paying more money. Under Obamas new proposed bill, health insurance companies would become unable to deny coverage to families and individuals based on pre-existing conditions. How so? This would be the cause of hundreds of thousands of health insurance company employees losing their jobs. This would be the cause of yet another large price increase in insurace, causing individuals and families to set aside even more money for required health insurance. Would this then not also be the cause of our contry slowly becoming a socialist nation? How are you coming to this conclusion? Are there other socialist nations you can research that would show they became socialist after they nationalized healthcare? Less money could be spent throughout our entire nation if we were to simply provide more free clinics around the nation. What do you mean by "free"? How simple is it to provide more clinics? Are there complications with putting up these "free" clinics? By making these more easily accessble to those without health insurance, we would be able to provide care to those who need it, without paying for services unneeded or creating such large tax increases. If these clinics were created, tax increase would still be nessicary, but not in such dramatic and noticable ways. How would it not be noticeable? How would this be taxed, state or federal? This would also save individuals and families from paying for uneeded or unwanted coverage. Although many say that these new healthcare guidlines will be providing a better life for U.S. citizens and expanding on the "American Dream" it is simply not true. These new healthcare guidlines will only raise prices, decrease the quality of our current healthcare, create longer waiting lines, and make the overall healthcare experience more stressfull. As Americans, we are given the possiblity to create our own American dream, not to provide the dream for others. By providing health insurance for all United States citizens are being punished. Indiviuals and families would be forced to spend more money. Business' would face increased operating expenses, increasing the price of all goods and services produced. A half trillion dollar tax increase would affect every indiviual living in the U.S. economically. **Sammie-** **Excellent intro, and you provide a strong ending. What you seem to be saying in this final is that healthcare is a privilege, not a right (might need a little more to emphasize that point), and throughout the body, you list the complications of having nationalized healthcare. To strengthen this paper, consider adding a few points from more sources other than just the Washington Post. I remember you saying your mom works in the healthcare industry, maybe doing an interview on how she is dealing with potential problems, and providing some of that interview in the paper would put an interesting and more personal edge. What you have is good so far, but think about the questions I ask within your writing and see if those ideas would help you tweak your paper. I'm sad this is the last paper of yours I get to read! Good luck and I enjoyed working with you!**

**-Maryl**


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">REFLECTION #3 ****<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 04.25.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **