Shaina+Mugan+6-M.E.

﻿ ﻿ ﻿ ﻿﻿ Roosevelt Student: 6-M.E. 1) during this process I think I improved the most on making it clear that there is no solid definition of success and it is a very personal thing that changes for each and every person. 2) my drake person helped me get more organized with my paper and create a more clear thesis statement so that I was then able to build off of that. 3) I need the most help improving probably my word choice because I don't use very complex words and possibly even being more clear with what I am trying to say so it's not so all over the place.


 * Letters of Introduction ( **due 01.21.11 **) **


 * Rough Draft - Definition ( ****RHS** due 01.27.11; **171** due 01.28.11 **) **

Hey Maddy (am I spelling this correctly?), I hope the writing is going well! I wanted to remind you to get that working draft up here today! Also, if you'll remember from class on Monday, I will be flying out of town on Wednesday(tomorrow), so the sooner you can get it up here today, the better my chances are at being able to respond before I leave. I'm excited to see the progress-that first draft was looking really good. Anyway, be sure to ask any questions if you have them! Talk soon, Shaina

Hey girl! It's Maddi and I'm superrrrrr sorry I didn't get anything posted before you left town, I wasn't a member and wasn't aware because of that whole partner mishap so I couldn't write on here /: but it's all good now so I'll have my final draft up tonight!! Thank youuuu :)

Maddi, Hey again, (sorry about the wild color here, I wanted you to see my new post!) don't stress too much about not posting, we all have busy lives, I understand. However, from this point, I have a few questions. First- is the post at the top your reflection? It would be great for you to get that final draft up! I was just curious what you put together after our meeting at Drake about a week ago (it may be too late to revise much, but I was just curious how it went!). I wouldn't mind seeing your process a bit, so we can know what to focus on for future papers. So ya, we'll talk soon- keep warm in this arctic death land, Shaina Oh- and maybe try posting under the headlines below, so I can find your posts more easily as well?

﻿Hey Hey! Thank youuuu, good to hear and i'm glad you aren't too mad! About the post at the top, it isn't the reflection, it's just a thing we had to do in class the other day. Ms Lange wrote three questions on the board and asked us to answer them here. And the color changing thing is a great idea so we can tell easily enough when something new is here! Alsoooo I PROOMISEEE the next papers will go much more smoothly and be wayy more on time, just had to get used to this thing hahaha. <span style="color: #008080; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif;">But anywhoo, final draft is up as of last night so just let me know what ya thinkkk, talk to ya sooon! <span style="color: #008080; font-family: Tahoma,Geneva,sans-serif;">M.E.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Revision - Definition ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 01.31.11; **171** due 02.01.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">FINAL - Definition ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 02.02.11; **171** due 02.04.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


 * Mirror by Maddi Epping. (Titles can be one of the most important parts of any piece of writing, and I appreciate the creative approach you took here). **

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">Everybody wants to be successful. We want to reach our goals in order to acheive that sense of pride. When we grow old and gray, we may sit down and begin to reflect on our lives. To sigh with releif while we look back because we are able to say to ourselves "I did it" will bring such a joyous, euphoric feeling. According to the Oxford English Dictionary the word success is defined by the accomplishment of an aim or purpose, the attainment of fame, wealth, or social status. The word dates back to the Latin mid 16th century, from the verb succedere, which means to come close after. While a simple definition for the word can be found, the meaning is a little more deep and not so constant. True success is defined by the individual who lives it.

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">How would you define success? A happy life, a loving supportive family, a stable job or career, money? These are all common characteristics of success, on a stereotypical, shallow level. When success is looked at on a deeper level, in the brightest of light the meaning may start to look a little different. Success is a mirror. <span style="color: #0000ff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">﻿﻿(Still totally in to this metaphor for success!) ﻿ <span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">For each person that looks into it, it changes drastically and obtains an endless amount of different traits. Like your reflection in a dirty mirror, your name and success in the same sentence may be a little cloudy at first, but as you set goals and work hard to acheive them things will start to clear up.

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">Success to one, may not be success to another so labeling someone as successful or unseccussful may not be accurate. If a man has what looks to be a happy family, and a beautiful home, a great job as the company CEO, and money, you would most likely label him sucessful, but if this same man had life long dreams of becoming a rocket scientist, he may not consider his life or himself a success. <span style="color: #0000ff; font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">﻿(The use of example here is helpful for the reader. I know this is the final-- but for future work: what other types of successes (or unsuccessful) examples could you have added as well? Is success based only on what your job or family looks like? How might someone from other cultures view success? How do YOU view success for yourself- as a student, and young person in America?

<span style="font-family: 'Times New Roman',Times,serif;">Anyone and everyone can reach total life success. Considering that true success is defined by the individual who is living it, if you set reasonable goals for yourself and always perform at your fullest potential, success is yours. Enjoy it like your favorite song, or the last piece of pie because you've earned it. I like how you returned to your main idea in the conclusion that you came up with. It also has a conclusive feel to it. Since this is a final, I will not comment too much. One thing- It seems as if many of your ideas are abstractly or creatively driven-- have you thought about creative writing? I know you said you didn't do it much, but if it interests you at all, I would encourage you to look into it! (like a class or, of course, on your own). **So, with that, again don't worry about the late posts etc for this time around- there was a lot of changes with partners etc,- a lot of kinks to work out. Let's just shoot to make the next papers more consistent. Also, communication is good- for whatever reason, if you are struggling with getting stuff up here on time, just jot a quick line telling me that and when you hope to get it up. The reason really doesn't matter-- we all have our own. So ya, happy writing and we'll be in touch!** **-Shaina**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">REFLECTION #1 ****<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 02.08.11; **171** due 02.11.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

Hey Maddi- Hope your week has gone well. I was wondering if you could try to get the draft up for this (classification/division) essay before Wednesday, since you guys are supposed to come to class on Wed. That would be very helpful I think for both of us. Mmmk. Let me know how it's comin. Talk to you soon.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Rough Draft - Classification/Division ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 02.16.11; **171** due 02.18.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

Heyyyy! I got up some of my RD, this isn't the whole thing, I probs have like three or four more paragraphs I wanna add still but you get the idea. I wanted to get away from the success topic because I feel like defining it was enough, I went more for a Human Being angle, and wanted to put in a twist on how the things that classify us, actually divide us! I thought it was pretty clever hahaha but I will see you tomorrow and we can talk about it then. Thanks!!!!

When we as people classify something, we put it into some sort of category or group which usually comes with a label or name. As we begin to divide something, division said to be the opposite of classification **(can "division" be a sort of classification? With what you seem to be getting at ("these so called classifications are the leading cause of division"**)**division and classification are not opposites at all, but instead, at times working in the same way) Maybe think about how you and the reader generally would consider what "opposite" means and if it is working with the point you are trying to make).**, we seperate or segregate those things. All humans classify other humans and a variety of other objects, ideas or items daily, sometimes without even knowing it.
 * (How are you feeling about adding these first 2 paragraphs together, like we talked about in class? Or switching around the sentences to place the thesis where you want it : "These things, because they are considered categories and given names can without a doubt be called classifications, but these so called classifications are the leading cause of division".) ﻿Im deff feelin it! Im gonna add em together and switch a few things around when I retype it in the revisions section so it should be cool. Also, I added the semi colon down there but is that the righ spot cause I can't remember!? **

The human race is a massive, world bearing species that comes together under one main name, people. People can be classified by many different traits and categories. The most well known and predominant being gender, race, religion and political views; **(you feeling the use of s semi-colon here like we talked about in class?)** these things, because they are considered categories and given names can without a doubt be called classifications, but these so called classifications are the leading cause of division.

Gender is the physical, biological aspect of human beings.**(for this statement, I want you to do a google search of "gender vs. sex" look at the differences that come up, and consider if it is //Gender// or //Sex// you are really after for this certain classification-- the first statement is characteristic of "sex", not gender, BUT if you do want to explore what more is involved in gender, I have no doubt that you will find very useful ideas for your argument paper) ﻿ ﻿I take women in literature with Ms. Lange (BEST CLASS EVER BTW) and that was like the first thing we learned! Gender vs Sex. Gender is how you identify yourself though action, dress, attitude, activities and so on or how others see you but sex is like the unavoidable truth, your physical parts. Right lol? I think for this classification im going more for the standard gender- male, female type of thing, black and white, no gray area kind of thing because it's too broad to really go into for this essay if I go into like gay, bisexual, transgendered, cross dressing and all of that. (ok, cool, ya, I'm glad you guys talked about it, however, I think that most experts agree that gender does not necessarily regard your physical attributes, but is instead a culturally constructed idea about how we should behave that is based on our SEX- which is the physical/biological that you are discussing- so YES! you have the right idea- therefore, if you want to do the "back and white" basics- I'd go with "sex". Just a suggestion that will clear that up better I think, for most readers! ﻿ Gender** can be classified and or divided into two main parts with certain exceptions, but are most commonly known as male and female. With only two basic options as to what gender you are classified under, it seems to be the biggest dividing factor for the human race. **(Yes, the battle of the sexes, right? HUGE classification!)** It goes back to the age**-**old question**:** were men and women created equal? For years women have been looked at as the inferior species, living in the shadow of men. No matter what your stance on woman's rights happens to be, there is no doubt about the fact that the division is there.**(yup)** It is a physical thing that stays with you till death and cannot be avoided. **(is this true for all people?) ﻿ There are soooo many things in this paper that I could just go on and on about and go deeper into and just write FOREVERRR! I just wish I had more time /: Like this transgendered sub topic that I could easily go into and how people can choose to mentally change their sex and or physically change their sex through major surgery and hormone/testosterone injections and wat not! But I only have so much I can say here I feel like! **

Race is another physical aspect of human beings. **(can race be biologically determined? look into it)** Race tends to not be as straight forward as gender because of the variety behind it, with gender their are two basic options that usally don't mix or mesh, but with race it is possible to be half of one thing, half of another, or even partially something, infact it is not an uncommon thing to be mutliracial in todays world. Like gender, race is something you are born with and cannot avoid, hide from, or change, it is with you until the day you die. Race is usually classified by the continent you were born in or originate from since usually thoe**/the?** continents share a common color factor in each of their countires. For example, African, European, Australian, Asian, Latino. Those are all large race groups but can be broken down into smaller parts like Yugoslovian, Chinese, Mexican, and Kenyon.**(only the Kenyon's get to be capitalized!? I wonder how the "chinese" would feel about that. :) ) ﻿Bahaha ooops! ** Throughout history race has proven to be an even greater dividing factor for the human race, if not the greatest most negative backed up by slavery, segregation, and racism. **(the wording at the end of this sentence are confusing for me). ﻿I just meant like out of all of the classifications humans face, race seems to be the one that has proven to be the most negative when it comes to dividing. For example, men and women are divided physically but there has never been a point in history where they have universally like hated each other and acted upon that hate with crimes and murder and what not like back in the days of slavery and the reconstruction after slavery where black and white people literally HATEDDDDD eachother and it was like a massive panic type of thing, ya know? It is worded quite awkwardly though so I will retry :) ﻿REWORD!!: ** Out of all of the classifications that human beings face, race has throughout history proven to be the one that has done the most dividing. With such negative occurances of racism that have been known to divide people of different color and even gone as far as creating crimes and acts of murder and violence against one another. ﻿ **I hope that's better! Also, feel free to write in any suggestions on things I can add or channge, I really do appreciate and love TONNSSS of help and feedback. Yayayay thanks!!!** ﻿**(Yes, this adds some clarity, I understand what you are saying about race, but also consider the other classifications that you are discussing--think about religion and political views when it comes to segregation and violence! I mean- the holocaust! :) ha, race may have some close competitors here, right? Religious persecution has been happening for centuries!**

When it comes to the classification and division of religion from a worldwide standpoint, there are many different religions, all based soley on opinion. (woah! big statement, I'm not saying I disagree, but think about the use of the word "opinion"- does "opinion" void any possibility for truth or facts? With too many types and categories of religion to even begin to name the division effect that it has on people troubles me greatly. For one to be so closed minded that he or she truely thinks that their his/her ﻿ religion, which happens to have no proven aspects to it is better than or more true then anybody elses religion is quite annoying. Religion divides people by their place of practice, the things they believe in, how you think, act and grow up and even what one is allowed to do and say. The diversity in religion is just as wide as the diversity of our hair color, height, weight, shoes size and ect. so shouldn't religion be accepted as just another part of who you are just like all of these characteristics? You would think that the answer would simply be yes, but years and years of religious segregation and oppression around the world have proven against that theory. Does the religion that somebody else practices, whatever religion that may be really affect your life in such a negative way that you would need to criticize and belittle them? The answer is no, so people should really learn to worry about themselves and their beliefs instead of others. **What else can I add to this!? Its superrrr short and I pretty much said all I wanted to say..I think.** ** ﻿(perhaps you could talk about histories of religious segregation? even in America, views other than Christian views are still oppressed, right? ) **

Politics tend to be a very contreversial topic. Here in the U.S. we have two main political parties, Democrats and Republicans. We also have a few smaller groups like the green party and the independents. The two main parties tend to be as different as night and day in extreme cases but what some don't seem to grasp is that just because one considers them self part of a certain party does not mean they have to share every single view that the party stands for. The U.S. obviously stands for United States, which implies that we are all one and we stick together but how can that be when we have so much political opposition? Surely it isn't possible for everyone in such a large, diverse country to all have the same views and ideas but must we oppose each others beliefs with such hate and remorse? Democrats blame the republicans for the problems in this country and vice versa and that blame game is the exact thing that makes this country "so horrible." For living in one of the most, if not the top economically stable, beautiful, free, diverse, and excepting countries our citizens sure do complain A LOT about how crappy it is. There is so much talk from both parties and even the smaller sub-parties about how the democrats will ruin the country, the republicans will ruin the country and blah blah blah. News flash-if either of the parties were going to ruin the country, it would have happened by now-SO STOP talking about it. It is good for this countries parties to display healthy disagreements every now and then but when it comes to a point when most politicians from both parties are known for their bad attitudes, scandals, and controversy that surround them it is getting a little extreme. If everyone in this country would stop worrying so much about bringing down the opposite party and started worrying a little more about what is actually good for this country and all of its citizens we would be a little bit better off and much less immature looking. (yes, I think you have def. pulled out the "blank and white" groups here. How are they divided? What have some issues been? -- I guess focus and filling in these ideas with politics and getting a conclusion in here. happy writing!

People are the most popular and powerful species on earth. We all share the common human being label but differ in so many ways, we are classified into so many sub categories and groups that sadly seem to divide us so often. We look at these differences as a bad thing and that is what leads to this division. If all people could accept the differences that we share and start to use them to our advantage of togetherness instead of what divides us we may be surprised at the great things, much greater than these classifications that we could accomplish.

** ﻿ Maddi- I have really enjoyed this draft. I can see that you have been thinking critically about the world in which you are a member. Were you thinking the paragraphs you were going to add were going to be about "religion" and :political views"? Since those are the other two categories in your intro. paragraph, I think that those would be a great place to go next. Since I plan on seeing you today, we can talk other specifics in class, and then I will come back to this and include some other ideas we come up with. Sound alright? k. I'll see you soon!**
 * Alright- So, again, Maddi, I am really appreciating your thoughts on how the world is classified, and thus divided.- not to mention, it is a very creative way to hit both options in your assignment! I will mention again, what an excellent topic this would be for an argument paper! As for this paper, think about the few things that I asked you. I think many readers might be skeptical of some of the language you are using-- specifically, "gender" and "race". So ya, get those last two paragraphs in and the conclusion and let's see how it looks.**
 * I really do look forward to reading it. Talk soon,**
 * Shaina**
 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Revision - Classification/Division ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 02.23.11; **171** due 02.25.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

When we as people classify something, we put it into some sort of category or group which usually comes with a label. As we divide something, division said to be the opposite of classification, we seperate or segregate those things. All humans classify other humans and a variety of other objects, ideas or items daily (what is the difference between "objects" and "items" here?), sometimes without even knowing it.** <---YES! Big time. Think about how this is working in society- when people are so trained to do something without thinking about it. What kind of problems might this be causing? Does it make the issues of racism, sexism etc more complicated and more difficult to remedy? Like, how can people change this behavior if they don't even know they are doing it? **The human race is a massive, world bearing species that comes together under one main name, people. People can be classified by many different traits and categories. The most well known and predominant being sex, race, religion and political view; these things, because they are considered categories and given names can without a doubt be called classifications, but these so called classifications are the exact thing that seem to divide us.** (Yup. I think that semi-colon opens that thesis! Nice.) **

Sex, not to be confused with gender, relates to who you are, whether it be male, female or a happy medium. This could mean physically like gender or just how you present yourself or act.** (ins't sex more the physical aspect and gender "how you act and present yourself?") ** Like what was previously stated about gender, it can be classified and or divided into two main parts with certain exceptions, but are most commonly known as male and female. With two basic options as to what gender you are classified under, it seems to be the one of biggest dividing factor for the human race. ** (Yes! Consider, for your argument paper perhaps, what happens when we //don't// fit neatly into one of these two categories. Does this usually involve gender more or sex? For example, do people occupy a certain sex (M/F) and take on a different gender? How are they supposed to be classified!? Our society gets real uncomfortable with this, huh. ) **It goes back to the age**-**old question**:** were men and women created equal? For years women have been looked at as the inferior species, living in the shadow of men. No matter what your stance on woman's rights happens to be,** (<---By the way, this type of statement works well with arguments too- when you can discuss both sides in order to strengthen your own point) **there is no doubt about the fact that the division is there. With unlawful acts of sexism occuring worldwide, everyday, small and extreme.


 * Maddi- this is looking good. You seem to have a pretty good grasp of structure and organization here. So as you finish this piece, I really want you to think about the ideas you are exploring for your argument paper. (Many of my comments above might be useful to think about for the arg. paper) You have some awesome ways you could go. For example: the idea of division (division among us, in the workplace, rights, stigmas, stereotypes, etc) among the sexes and genders- hot topic and lots to say and to be argued. I have enjoyed the work you have done here and hope you get the rest up soon! Hope you are having a restful spring break! **
 * Shaina﻿ **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">FINAL - Classification/Division ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 03.01.11; **171** due 03.04.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">REFLECTION #2 ****<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 03.22.11; **171** due 03.25.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

The Plant. We have all heard of and/or maybe even have personally undergone the green experience at some point or another in our lives. It is a contreversial and extremely widespread topic of discussion, whether it be for its use medically/recreationally or against its use medically/recreationally. Marijuana, scientifically known as Cannabis Sativa is a plant that when harvested correctly has been used for ages to acheive a euphoric state of mind. The first documented reference to marijuana as a psychoactive agent dates back to 2737 BC and was a worldwide thing even at that time.
 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Rough Draft - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 03.30.11; **171** due 04.01.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

Marijuana used for medical purposes has many perks. ** (<---k, so this para. should discuss the perks of medical uses) ** It is used for many medical disorders and issues, not as a cure but as a pain killer, a distraction, a depression fighter and many other things. Cancer patients undergoing chemo therapy or radiation experience serious pain, appetite loss, fatigue, negative thoughts of death, and a number of other horrific effects from the serious and intense treatmeant. With the medical use of marijuana, these patients can overcome all of these side affects for a smooth recovery. Some states such as California, Alaska and a coupleof others have made medical marijuana legal, Iowa not being one of them** (new sentence here) M **y moms road to squamous cell cancer recovery was very tough with extreme radiation treatments daily leaving her tired, unable to eat and feeling extremely sick, and unhappy with her life. I know** (be careful with "I know" statements- some might argue that you don't, bc you are not an "expert") ** that with the use of marijuana this experience would have been so much easier for her which would have relieved stress for the whole family. Marijuana works as a pain reliever for people with extreme pains and discomfort on any region of their body.** (says who!?) **It is used as a distraction for patients with serious or even terminal illnesses who are left feeling hopeless and depressed after their almost unbearable experiences. Medical Marijuana can also be used to fight against depression, leaving patients with a happy, lighthearted, euphoric feeling after the medicinal use.

Okayyyy, so first of all HIIIIII, haven't talked to you in ages hahah! But yeah, this is pretty much all I have come up with so far but I think its a pretty good start. I KNOW I KNOW, superrrrr unorginal topic that im sure 34985498 other people have as well but it really is something that I feel pretty strongly about so I hope you support me in my choice of arguement! Alright girl, just let me know what ya think so far! And like always feel free to make as many comments and suggestions as possibleee! P.S. I plan on adding a paragraph about the recreational use and then also two more paragraphs, one about the downsides of medical, and the other about the neyysays of recreational use. Then an ending paragraph that sums it all up or whateverrr! Also, I need a thesis statement! And I even thought about maybe adding in alcohol for dimention and mentioning how alcohol use (in my opinion) in much worse than marijuana and has abosluetly no medical purposes. But idkk for sure, just let me know! -ME


 * Maddi! **
 * Hey, yes, long time. As you have mentioned- yes, this topic is done often- BUT the good part about that is that you'll be able to find a lot a info on it, PLUS, if it's something you feel passionately about, it will be easier to write about! Good. So, Yes, at this point, I am not sure what you are arguing- for example- for a more widespread legalization? For its medicinal advantages? What? Once I know that, we can construct a thesis. You are going to want reputable sources (like good experts)- this will strengthen your argument. Personal accounts (like with your mom) can be useful too, to show you have your own experience and knowledge. ALSO, some of the best argument bring in opposing arguments as well- you aren't trying to convince those of us who agree with you, you want to convince those who don't- and their arguments are as valid as yours, most likely. This is not about wrong and right- this is about argument, negotiation, convincing. Another thing- DO NOT make claims that you cannot support with evidence- evidence is crucial in an argument (you probably know this, I know). Ok, so I also only marked a few places in the text, I can see it is kind of rough- not as fluid as you usually write- which is FINE, but make sure you proof it all. Also, note that you do not have to convince me- I happen to know, pretty extensively, both sides of the argument, and am a proponent for progressive legislation involving this issue. OH - and another idea- check into information about taxes involved in the product (marijuana)- this is HUGE, there are incredible stats on how much this could benefit our economy if it was sold like other products, such as tobacco. Anyway, I'm interested to see where you take this. Talk soon, **
 * Shaina **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Revision (1) - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 04.05.11; **171** due 04.08.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **
 * Maddi! Hey! I want to read this paper! Haha. Get something up here, will ya? I want to see where you're going with this thing. **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Revision (2) - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 04.13.11; **171** due 04.15.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">FINAL - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 04.19.11; **171** due 04.22.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **

The Plant. We have all heard of and/or maybe even have personally undergone the green experience at some point or another in our lives. Marijuana, scientifically known as Cannabis Sativa is a plant that when harvested correctly can be used to acheive a euphoric feeling and has been used that way for years. The first documented reference to marijuana as a psychoactive agent dates back to 2737 BC and was a worldwide thing even at that time.**(<--- looks like you should have a source cited in here?)** Now, more and more people find themselves wondering if the every day use of this "drug" in our western society would be destructive or helpful.**(Yes, I see the argument more clearly now, BUT are you arguing that "more and more people..." OR whether or not pot is destructive or helpful? could be a little more clear here). (Also, why'd you take out the "**whether it be for its use medically/recreationally..." **in your original intro para? I think that, since the majority or your paper is discussing the medical benefits, maybe you should mention that in your thesis?)**

Critics say marijauna use is bad for many reasons but three most commonly known reasons have to do with the fact that it is bad for your lungs, it causes you to lose brain cells and it impaires your judgement.**the content of this "topic" sentence is not discussed in the paragraph! )** For these negative reasons, we look past all of the positive things that come from the use of this plant. It is viewed as a bad thing that should be frowned upon, therefore it is outlawed without any kind of real thought about the beneficial uses. **(this paragraph could use more than 2 sentences, I know that you have a lot to say!- Perhaps it is really even part of the next paragraph? I mean, it leads into it really well, and it IS only two sentences, maybe you should combine them?)**

Marijuana used for medical purposes has many perks. It is used for many medical disorders and issues, not as a cure but as a pain killer, a distraction, a depression fighter and many other things. Cancer patients undergoing chemo therapy or radiation experience serious pain, appetite loss, fatigue, negative thoughts of death, and a number of other horrific effects from the serious and intense treatmeant. With the medical use of marijuana, these patients can overcome all of these side affects for a smooth recovery. Some states such as California, Alaska and a couple of others have made medical marijuana legal, Iowa not being one of them.**(this transition into first person is kind of unexpected and rocky, maybe consider making it a new paragraph, or maybe mention, first, how you have personal insight?)** My ** ﻿ **moms road to squamous cell cancer recovery was very tough with extreme radiation treatments daily leaving her tired, unable to eat and feeling extremely sick, and unhappy. With th use of marijuana this experience may have been so much easier and smoother running for her which could have relieved stress for the whole family. Marijuana can work as a pain reliever for some people with extreme pains and discomfort in certain regions of their body/**ies**. It is used as a distraction for patients with serious or terminal illnesses who are left feeling hopeless and depressed. Medical Marijuana can also be used to fight against depression, leaving patients with a happy, lighthearted, euphoric feeling after the medicinal use.

(**Where's, the conclusion, lady!?)**


 * Maddi- ok, I am sensing that this is not actually your final version (since I know you write with more length and structure usually), which is fine with me, but IF it is-- you should work on this a lot before you turn it in. It is not complete. You need to clarify the thesis sentence, and write a conclusion. PLUS- it looks like you did a little bit of research at least (maybe you know some of the stuff), but where are your citations? And if you didn't do research- YOU SHOULD! at least find an expert or two to quote who agree with you. Frankly, you have not convinced me in your argument. :) (and like I said before, I know these arguments, and I am not one who needs convincing anyway).**
 * OK, I'm not sure when you are turning this in, but let me know if you have questions!**
 * Shaina**


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