Matthew+Smith+8-J.J.

Roosevelt Student: 8-J.J. Hello matt, I'm very sorry again for today. I didnt plan on missing any of these meetings of course with my luck they fall on days i can't do them. the first time i never got my permission slip signed because i never saw my parents the night she gave it to us which of course was the day before she wanted them great planning on her part right? and for today i am very sorry but i hope you understand that wednesdays we have early outs and on those days after school for an hour or two some of us participate in best buddies and she told us the first day of semester the days and said this one was after school and i told her that i couldn't do it. I missed almost all of last week due to illness and have fallen behind in all of my classes with this block scheduling we are doing which is supposed to help but if you miss a day your screwed. especially if you miss AP classes and come back to fail a test that i was forced to take. I am very very very sorry i know this is your grade as well and I had a conversation about this with Mrs. Lange. I didnt mean for this to happen and im trying my best to catch up with things while still doing three hours of track a day working on the weekends and doing best buddies. i will have my rough draft up for the classification up as soon as possible hopefully tonight. Im very sorry. John


 * While I was disappointed I didn't get to meet you and chat with you the other day, I totally understand the time conflicts I myself am very involved and it does get difficult at times to keep up. If you have any questions I'd be more than happy to help you out! I responded to you below in the rough draft area of this page. Let me know what you think or if you need more help with this. Shoot me an email when you've posted or with questions so that I know you've responded so I can get back to you faster. My email is matthew.smith@drake.edu. Thanks and can't wait to hear from you!**

Hello Matt,
 * Letters of Introduction ( **due 01.21.11 **) **

For starters, I'm John.I am a Junior at Roosevelt High School; I'm sure you already knew that though. I'm by no means an advanced student when it comes to English. Previous to this class I have taken one advanced English my sixth grade year. Surprisingly, last semester I somehow pulled off an very high C. I run Cross Country, I'm going to do track this spring, and I used to pitch for our baseball team. I wanna major in Architecture and Urban Design; I’ve always wanted to attend Michigan University. Can't wait to get to work with you, Matt.

-John Hello John!

I'm Matt and I'll be your partner during this Ex/Change Through Writing. Throughout this course I'll be reading what you've written and providing feedback that will help us both engage more with your writing. At Drake, I'm a magazine journalism and English double-major, and hope to work as an editor for a magazine. That being said, I'm hoping that this experience will help me improve at providing feedback to writers that is beyond grammar changes. I'm excited to get this project going and see what we can accomplish!

-Matt

Condescension There was one day in A.P. Lang a very wise man by the initials J.J. was pulled aside by his teacher. That day we had learned quite a lot of information for the final that would be taken a week or two later. This wise boy was not to overly excited to hear about the test and groaned after hearing this. After class this boy was pulled aside by his teacher and asked in a condescending way whether or not this boy would be in her class next semester or not. What she neglected to realize was that this boy was extremely close to the next higher grade and was working very hard every day and night to get that grade. He had done a nine page extra credit paper and was doing every question on the study guides for the books he was reading in class to get a solid score on the tests. She also didn't realize that the boy felt that there was no purpose to his extra work if this is how she perceived this boy in her class. To be condescending is to talk down on someone, imply your higher status wise than someone, or to imply you have to lower yourself to do something. Our good friend dictionary.com says condescension is showing or implying a usually patronizing descent from dignity or superiority. Condescension can be unintentional or very much on purpose, Condescension ranges from your tone, body language, and even just what you say. Some people unknowingly do it and others are condescending because they believe that they are better, smarter, or more classier than the other. **What happens when the other person doesn't understand condescension? How does this effect communication?** Tone of someones speech is a huge clue to whether or not someone is being condescending. For example you pitch in an idea to your group that your kind of on the edge about. One of the members of the group says," Wow, that's a great idea!" the enthusiasm behind it you know, hey I just thought of a good idea. On the other hand if this person says "Wow, that's a great idea" and he or she says is it with sarcasm like it was an awful idea, that is condescension. Not only with tone of voice but with body language you can portray yourself interested and all for doing whatever it is your doing, but you can also say why am I doing this or can't less as important as me do this. Kind of like your better than everyone else. People who are excited to do something have good posture are enthusiastic and do things without being asked repetitively. People who are condescending usually have bad posture, groan, cross their arms, and roll their eyes at things. You can also tell there being Condescending by the words they say. If you ask a question and your response is "are you serious?" people who are condescending like to make you feel bad or maybe sometimes they just are in shock that you really don't know what a word means or something like that. **Expand on this idea and share an example.** Some people don't always mean to but do anyways. So when the teacher asked that wise boy with the initials J.J. what English class i was going to take next semester, by her asking that using the clues of tone, body language, and by context the boy could tell that she thought he was not good enough for her class. **How did that make you feel, and how do you reply to a person who is being condescending?**
 * Rough Draft - Definition ( ****RHS** due 01.27.11; **171** due 01.28.11 **) **


 * I liked the way you told a story with your paper and the tone you used really showed that you understand the term. Try expanding more on your examples of condescension to help get your point across better. You've got a solid start on this and I can't wait to read your next draft.**


 * Revision - Definition ( ****RHS** due 01.31.11; **171** due 02.01.11 **) **

Condescension There was one day in A.P. Lang a very wise man by the initials J.J. was pulled aside by his teacher. That day we had learned quite a lot of information for the final that would be taken a week or two later. This wise boy was not to overly excited to hear about the test and groaned after hearing this. After class this boy was pulled aside by his teacher and asked in a condescending way whether or not this boy would be in her class next semester or not. What she neglected to realize was that this boy was extremely close to the next higher grade and was working very hard every day and night to get that grade. He had done a nine page extra credit paper and was doing every question on the study guides for the books he was reading in class to get a solid score on the tests. She also didn't realize that the boy felt that there was no purpose to his extra work if this is how she perceived this boy in her class. **I like this as your intro. It helps set the scene and gets the reader in the mood for the rest of your paper. Just work on the transition from this paragraph to the next to make it clear that the paper will be a definition of condescending.** To be condescending is to talk down on someone, imply your higher status wise than someone, or to imply you have to lower yourself to do something. Our good friend dictionary.com says condescension is showing or implying a usually patronizing descent from dignity or superiority. Condescension can be unintentional or very much on purpose, Condescension ranges from your tone, body language, and even just what you say. Some people unknowingly do it and others are condescending because they believe that they are better, smarter, or more classier than the other. If the person doesn't understand he is being Condescending it makes the conversation demeaning for the person or people the condescender is being condescending to. The person being condescending of course doesn't know he just believes this and it makes it so people don't want to be around him or have anything to do with him. **I like that you've made your definition of condescending more clear than in your first drift. Good work!** Tone of someones speech is a huge clue to whether or not someone is being condescending. For example you pitch in an idea to your group that your kind of on the edge about. One of the members of the group says," Wow, that's a great idea!" the enthusiasm behind it you know, hey I just thought of a good idea. On the other hand if this person says "Wow, that's a great idea" and he or she says is it with sarcasm like it was an awful idea, that is condescension. Not only with tone of voice but with body language you can portray yourself interested and all for doing whatever it is your doing, but you can also say why am I doing this or can't less as important as me do this. Kind of like your better than everyone else. People who are excited to do something have good posture are enthusiastic and do things without being asked repetitively. People who are condescending usually have bad posture, groan, cross their arms, and roll their eyes at things. You can also tell there being Condescending by the words they say. If you ask a question and your response is "are you serious?" people who are condescending like to make you feel bad or maybe sometimes they just are in shock that you really don't know what a word means or any textual evidence that says why don't you know this, how come you can't do this, etc.When it comes to this student with the initials J.J. and his advanced placement language class he does not know all the terms used in papers and in class he has to ask what words means frequently. When he would ask his classmates would unknowingly be condescending towards them because they knew what those terms meant and could not believe this student did not know them. Some people don't always mean to but do anyways. **Good example!** So when the teacher asked that wise boy with the initials J.J. what English class i was going to take next semester, by her asking that using the clues of tone, body language, and by context the boy could tell that she thought he was not good enough for her class. **It feels like this doesn't have a solid end. Did this make you give up when the teacher was condescending? What was your plan of action? Show this with your words instead of just telling that the teacher was condescending. You do a good job with your storytelling and this would also be effective in the conclusion to tie everything together.**


 * John,**
 * I like the changes you've made from the first draft. There's a lot of improvement and you've begun to explain yourself better. Watch out for sentences that tend to run on when you're giving your personal examples. You've got the definition part of the assignment, now just smooth out your paragraphs and watch out for the little grammatical errors. Can't wait to read your final paper!**

Im very sorry matt for not coming to the meeting. I never got my permission slip signed and i guess other people didnt and still went i was confused with the whole thing i heard everyone was really cool and im kind of upset i missed out! I am also sorry for not posting this on time this whole posting it on wiki is confusing on when i have to do it when my teacher isn't at class and we have a snow day and all that. **Don't worry about it! I also get confused with the wiki posting and when it's due, so we'll just have to make sure we're on the same page with it haha. Because we didn't get to discuss together my edits from last time, if you have questions about my comments or a question about what you're thinking about writing, feel free to email me at matthew.smith@drake.edu.**
 * FINAL - Definition ( ****RHS** due 02.02.11; **171** due 02.04.11 **) **

Condescension There was one day in A.P. Lang a very wise man by the initials J.J. was pulled aside by his teacher. That day we had learned quite a lot of information for the final that would be taken a week or two later. This wise boy was not to overly excited to hear about the test and groaned after hearing this. After class this boy was pulled aside by his teacher and asked in a condescending way whether or not this boy would be in her class next semester or not. What she neglected to realize was that this boy was extremely close to the next higher grade and was working very hard every day and night to get that grade. He had done a nine page extra credit paper and was doing every question on the study guides for the books he was reading in class to get a solid score on the tests. She also didn't realize that the boy felt that there was no purpose to his extra work if this is how she perceived this boy in her class. To be condescending is to talk down on someone, imply your higher status wise than someone, or to imply you have to lower yourself to do something. Our good friend dictionary.com says condescension is showing or implying a usually patronizing descent from dignity or superiority. Condescension can be unintentional or very much on purpose, Condescension ranges from your tone, body language, and even just what you say. Some people unknowingly do it and others are condescending because they believe that they are better, smarter, or more classier than the other. If the person doesn't understand he is being Condescending it makes the conversation demeaning for the person or people the condescender is being condescending to. The person being condescending of course doesn't know he just believes this and it makes it so people don't want to be around him or have anything to do with him. Tone of someones speech is a huge clue to whether or not someone is being condescending. For example you pitch in an idea to your group that your kind of on the edge about. One of the members of the group says," Wow, that's a great idea!" the enthusiasm behind it you know, hey I just thought of a good idea. On the other hand if this person says "Wow, that's a great idea" and he or she says is it with sarcasm like it was an awful idea, that is condescension. Not only with tone of voice but with body language you can portray yourself interested and all for doing whatever it is your doing, but you can also say why am I doing this or can't less as important as me do this. Kind of like your better than everyone else. People who are excited to do something have good posture are enthusiastic and do things without being asked repetitively. People who are condescending usually have bad posture, groan, cross their arms, and roll their eyes at things. You can also tell there being Condescending by the words they say. If you ask a question and your response is "are you serious?" people who are condescending like to make you feel bad or maybe sometimes they just are in shock that you really don't know what a word means or any textual evidence that says why don't you know this, how come you can't do this, etc.When it comes to this student with the initials J.J. and his advanced placement language class he does not know all the terms used in papers and in class he has to ask what words means frequently. When he would ask his classmates would unknowingly be condescending towards them because they knew what those terms meant and could not believe this student did not know them. Some people don't always mean to but do anyways. Condescension can make people wanna quit their goals. It can also make people persevere them even more. When the teacher asked that wise boy with the initials J.J. what English class i was going to take next semester, by her asking that using the clues of tone, body language, and by context the boy could tell that she thought he was not good enough for her class and made him want to finish the year more.

Thank you Matt! I never really get any help with the context from my fellow classmates, it's usually grammer, etc.


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While working with you I feel like I have improved most on using contextual examples. Every time I sent in a draft I needed to add another example to further explain what I was trying to convey to the audience of my piece. I know understand where to expand in my piece and add examples.what helped the most was when you went into the paper and said what I should do to make it better.I need the most help with improving well I'll figure I'm about to do a timed writing.


 * This has been a great experience so far! I'm working on being able to look beyond grammar and mechanical errors and being able to respond in ways that will hopefully inspire more writing. I think I could do a better job of explaining my comments so you'll be able to better understand them, and I can be more thorough in my responses. For the next assignment, I hope to have you ask me questions about the assignment so I can help you better from draft to draft.**

since i didnt get a chance to chat with you today maybe i should ask before i start my paper. how would i classify condescension? i was going to further go into the definition because well why not i've been working with it so it should make it easier. i dont want to do simple classifications like intentional and unintentional ya know? i am having trouble thinking of how to word the different classifications
 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Rough Draft - Classification/Division ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 02.16.11; **171** due 02.18.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


 * Hey John! I'm trying to think of other classifications of condescension but I'm really stuck on the intentional and unintentional. I think that might be the best way to go about it. Have you thought of any other ideas of how to classify/divide condescension, are there other forms of condescension? I think you have a solid base with your definition of condescension, so I do agree that you should go further into it like you said. Does this help clarify things and do you have any more questions I can help you with?**


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 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">FINAL - Classification/Division ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 03.01.11; **171** due 03.04.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


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 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Rough Draft - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 03.30.11; **171** due 04.01.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


 * <span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">Revision (1) - Argument ( **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">**RHS** due 04.05.11; **171** due 04.08.11 **<span style="font-family: 'Lucida Sans Unicode','Lucida Grande',sans-serif;">) **


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